lunes, 19 de octubre de 2015

Letter Correction

Dear Hassan,

I'm writing this letter to you because i'm feeling sad and guilty about the revenge I did when we were young, since that day have never seen each other again and I always think about it, because we were really good friends. It was a moment of anger and jealously, which take me to an action really stupid, but I though it would be better so I could make something to feel happy about it, but it didn't do anything, it only make it worst and not only affect me, ask Baba, who was impressed about the decision your father made, that was leaving the house in such a surprising way, that hit so hard to my father, by the relationship your father and Baba when they were young.

This revenge, did not finish the way I expected, I just want to do something that could fix the way I was feeling because of the way that Baba treated me. By that moment I really didn't care about the decision your father make, I thought it would be better, so Baba could pay more attention to me and recognize what I'm trying to do to make him proud and make him feel good of what he did and taught me. Since those days, I started my education here in America, and I got a good grade in the college, but by the past of years I start feeling bad about of me, so I didn't care about being a doctor because of Baba dream, I take seriously the role of been a science-fiction writer, it was what I want and it's the only thing that makes me happy, instead of being a doctor, something that I wouldn't be happy at all. This is what I want to be and I'm gonna take it seriously, Baba accepted to what I want and support me with this, so I start writing to make it official. By the pass of the days, I meet the daughter of our general here in America and at the moment I know her, it call my attention and since that day I went to met her and I saw her reading a book, I told her, I was a Science-Fiction writer and that someday I'll bring her a book of myself so she could see how I was writing, so I, came back one day, to gave her the book I promise her the other day, she take a look at it and seems that she like how it looks by the smile on her face but in that moment, the general appears, he take a look at the book and he throw it away and put his hand in my shoulder and told me it wasn't good what I was doing, that I should go back with Baba.
By the pass of the days, I saw the daughter of the general coming to my way and in her hands, I could see that she was holding my book, when she got right next to me, she told me that she love the book and I was a great writer, since that day we star dating, and she help me with my science-fiction novels. This past week, Baba start feeling sick and more decrepit but always with his powerful attitude that he can do everything, but we always help him in what it's harder for him, but we hope he gets better, so we can see each other again. Finally, my dear friend, I hope you get this letter soon, hope to see you soon and talk about all the things that happen since the last time I saw you, maybe one of this day I go these day I will go to visit my special friend and revive the old times.

Greetings 

Amir.

Rationale Correction

The main focus of this letter is about the regret of Amir because of the revenge he made to Amir, trying to solve that problem and to not ruin their friendship, also telling him about what was going on in his head when he did that type of revenge to Hassan and that he felt guilty and stupid about it. In the next paragraphs, I wrote about the life of Amir in America, what he was doing and when he met his love, or in another word, his current wife. 
The letter is based in the "mission" to reunite the friendship between Amir and Hassan, but it could be easily read or understood by any reader. This letter as we can see, is obviously to Hassan, his old friend that separate from his life when the father of Hassan decided to leave the house.
This mainly letter is based in different chapter of the book but always focused in Amir and his life, basically, telling his life in America and the regret of the act to Hassan, trying to fix it and to get in touch with his old friend.